He wouldn't have been happy with a boring kiss, even in a dream. I don't know why my first kisses have always been awkward. Probably because I haven't had many kisses, first or otherwise. The awkwardness could entirely be me. Either way, it was perfect for John and Sherlock.
I will say it again, btw, for more positive reinforcement - You write John really really well.
When I write, I tend to really focus on dialogue.
I admire your ability to write dialogue so well. It's the thing I struggle with in fic, which is part of why I write so little fic in general (and when I do, there's not much dialogue). I felt your descriptions were so fantastic... I loved the bits in the beginning that led up to John's dream. The cashier's neck, Sarah's lips. It was really well done.
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Date: 2010-09-09 05:55 pm (UTC)He wouldn't have been happy with a boring kiss, even in a dream. I don't know why my first kisses have always been awkward. Probably because I haven't had many kisses, first or otherwise. The awkwardness could entirely be me. Either way, it was perfect for John and Sherlock.
I will say it again, btw, for more positive reinforcement - You write John really really well.
When I write, I tend to really focus on dialogue.
I admire your ability to write dialogue so well. It's the thing I struggle with in fic, which is part of why I write so little fic in general (and when I do, there's not much dialogue). I felt your descriptions were so fantastic... I loved the bits in the beginning that led up to John's dream. The cashier's neck, Sarah's lips. It was really well done.